I have a well written research proposal, however, it needs to be edited accordin

I have a well written research proposal, however, it needs to be edited according to the following comment: “This is a good start, but at present is not a PhD standard. While the proposal covers some interesting context, the academic rationale and contribution of the study requires further development. While the KSA’s and MBS’s 2030 Vision is a very popular topic for research, the basis of the focus on tourism is the diversification of the economy and the growth/development of the tourism product (rather than diversification itself). Pilgrimage tourism to KSA will still take place, but the policy is to grow other tourism markets/products alongside this. Therefore, to develop your proposal to PhD standard it would be useful to engage with the wider academic literature on tourism policy, and specifically tourism policy for growth. In recent years there has been a lot of academic debate on growth policy in conjunction with the focus on sustainability (which is another key facet of the 2030 Vision), and how to resolve the paradox between tourism growth and sustainability. The other key areas that you might want to focus on are the research questions and the methodology. In PhD research the research questions/objectives need to go beyond an evaluation and analysis of existing data, and contribute to academic knowledge. PhD research also entails the collection of primary data, rather than the analysis of secondary data, so these are things that you need to consider when developing your proposal further.” Also, I would like the title to be changed accordingly, as well as the time frame to be edited into 3 years total.